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Random Thoughts.....What Are You Thinking?
Random Thoughts.....What are you thinking?
Not quite!
If I'm writing a story in stream-of-consciousness first person, I want to be able to use past tense narration to describe events happening, but present tense to describe the narrator's thoughts.
However, on paper it just looks like a mess.
Don't know what to do to make it look better.
If I'm writing a story in stream-of-consciousness first person, I want to be able to use past tense narration to describe events happening, but present tense to describe the narrator's thoughts.
However, on paper it just looks like a mess.
Don't know what to do to make it look better.
Phoenix.Dabackpack said: »
Not quite!
If I'm writing a story in stream-of-consciousness first person, I want to be able to use past tense narration to describe events happening, but present tense to describe the narrator's thoughts.
However, on paper it just looks like a mess.
Don't know what to do to make it look better.
If I'm writing a story in stream-of-consciousness first person, I want to be able to use past tense narration to describe events happening, but present tense to describe the narrator's thoughts.
However, on paper it just looks like a mess.
Don't know what to do to make it look better.
But that was just messy when I did it way back when.
My problem is something like this:
"I walked over to the desk. Man, that girl is an idiot."
Doesn't look too bad here, but with a lot of it, I would imagine it would become hard to read.
"I walked over to the desk. Man, that girl is an idiot."
Doesn't look too bad here, but with a lot of it, I would imagine it would become hard to read.
Actually, narrating actions and thinking is usually either not bothered to be differentiated, or you can do like I do and just italicize the thoughts.
/zombie.
Yeah that's my problem Josiah, I can't make it seem right either.
I also considered italics, but I was hoping there's some other way to get it to work out (because I have top secret plans for italic text!).
I thought of something like this:
I walked to the desk, placing my blahblahblah on the blahblhablah. I hoped I wouldn't be approached by that idiot Richard or else I would have felt the urge to blah blah him in the face.
<Insert present tense thoughts here>
So basically I would divide the writing into past tense and present tense. I think that would make it lose the immediacy of the moment though, so maybe I'll stick with the italics.
Thanks guys!
Edit: Yeah that could work too. I'll write up a draft of an excerpt and see which looks better.
I also considered italics, but I was hoping there's some other way to get it to work out (because I have top secret plans for italic text!).
I thought of something like this:
I walked to the desk, placing my blahblahblah on the blahblhablah. I hoped I wouldn't be approached by that idiot Richard or else I would have felt the urge to blah blah him in the face.
<Insert present tense thoughts here>
So basically I would divide the writing into past tense and present tense. I think that would make it lose the immediacy of the moment though, so maybe I'll stick with the italics.
Thanks guys!
Edit: Yeah that could work too. I'll write up a draft of an excerpt and see which looks better.
Is my subligar not good enough for your avatar!?
Ramuh.Sagittario said: »
/zombie.
Bismarck.Josiahkf said: »
honestly dude you'd be fine either way. if a narrator says they walked and then said thoughts, it's not hard to distinguish if it's well written. but "I walked to my desk. Man that girl is an idiot." is poorly written, part of why it might feel off There is no way some person somewhere can think "man that girl is an idiot" and think nothing else or not think of a single reason why she's appearing idiotic etc
Was just a random example. I think I'll be okay though. Thanks :)
Bismarck.Josiahkf said: »
honestly dude you'd be fine either way. if a narrator says they walked and then said thoughts, it's not hard to distinguish if it's well written. but
"I walked to my desk. Man that girl is an idiot." is poorly written, part of why it might feel off
There is no way some person somewhere can think "man that girl is an idiot" and think nothing else or not think of a single reason why she's appearing idiotic etc
Is my subligar not good enough for your avatar!?I ran out of room that's all. I was so out of room i had to un-animate my own avatar
"I walked to my desk. Man that girl is an idiot." is poorly written, part of why it might feel off
There is no way some person somewhere can think "man that girl is an idiot" and think nothing else or not think of a single reason why she's appearing idiotic etc
Ramuh.Sagittario said: »
Is my subligar not good enough for your avatar!?
Unnacceptable D:
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yomi! i did some 3v3's. i own at 3v3.
oh god i hope you guys are not talking about COD...
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Do I try and finish levelling NIN or start work on BLU?
Shiva.Leonkasai said: »
Do I try and finish levelling NIN or start work on BLU?
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